Tuesday, February 19, 2008

Partitioned

Retaining isn’t all they do
they stand for more than that
obstructing an improper view
or keeping out the cat;

at times they lend complete support
sometimes they’re just for show
defining a defenseless sort
with nowhere else to go—

so cry behind, or sit astride
or lean against these things
like rats that scurry on inside
the structure building brings.

21 comments:

~beth ♥ said...

The words "cry behind" brought an unexpected, yet perfect, visual image of a partition and the need to be separated.

Bubba said...

I'm willing to bet you're a Harley guy, aren't you? I've heard similar sentiments expressed about 'cages'... although not as well.

noahthegreat said...

Strange yet interesting and perfectly valid images.

Good work!

Shirley said...

The first thing that comes to mind when I read this is good fences make good neighbors! There are two perspectives here. It depends on whether you're shutting yourself in or shutting the world out.

Stacey said...

your poetry fascinates me I especially like "help"

ozymandiaz said...

I busy my day holding them up.
Don't think I've ever read an ode to walls before, and this one pretty much covered it.

rch said...

Hi Beth, glad that image stuck with you. Thanks a lot.

Hey Bub, nah, not really, I'm in my own form of enclosure truth be told.

Hey Noah, you just summed up my entire existence in your first 3 words.

Yes Shirley, that is part of it.

Hi Stacey, well thanks, you're too kind.

Hi Ozmo, you nailed it my friend!

Gerald Galindez said...

thanks for the comment bud,

I really Choose the word in relation to the theme and point of view... ^_^

i am sick this day and so it felt like it.

take care and God bless

rch said...

Keep rocking ger, hope you feel better!

Robert Lloyd said...

RCH, this was a great poem to read. I think most people went the metaphoric route but you did so well with a little reality. I liked the flow and the many uses you skillfully placed within the poem. Great work thank you for sharing!

Systematic Weasel said...

A wonderful flow to this piece! Excellently crafted work! =)

-Weasel

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Bob,
Your words have managed to encompass almost all reasons we might have, to be in contact with any walls. Both the physical or just simply those barriers we encounter, through our lifetime journey.
A vivid Poetry Prompt......
Best wishes, Eileen

Philip Thrift said...

This poem is fun to read. Well done!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Cool! A poem about a real wall:) I enjoyed it! Good response to the prompt.

flaubert said...

love the rhyming here!
Pamela

signed...bkm said...

the list of everything we use walls for -- to lean against, cry behind... walls have taken on a whole new dimension with this prompt....nicely done...bkm

Diane T said...

Cats and rats! What a brilliant metaphor!

RiikaInfinityy said...

Kind of amuse me with the first stanza :3 Wonderfully written with cats and rats!<3

Ellie said...

I like cry behind; You are skilled and painting so many visuals...
Amazing~

Jingle said...

skillful words.
love the perspective.

my wall entry

Carrie Burtt said...

Bob love all the images painted here...you have covered the spectrum of a wall....great writing! :-)