He longed to impress her
then sweetly caress her
and one day declared
he had to possess her
and no cost was spared
to show that he cared
convincing his kin
that he was impaired
and they felt chagrin
while checking him in
to the small padded room
where he waits with a grin.
17 comments:
hahaha love will def drive you crazy...at times....
very true
Aww--this made me grin!
Oh, the poor fellow!
You sure found a clever way to address the multiple meanings of commitment. Well done!
Neat locked rhyme to anticipate the ending. And, without that tone and the grin, I would have wanted to free him! Nicely done!
On some days, I guess crazy love can make you crazy!
Wonderfully fun! and perfect twist ending there--big smiles (and a giggle!) :-)
Yup. I know someone who needs a Love Intervention right now! Loved this poem, made me smile!
Where he awaits with a grin... he does sound a bit crazy, which love can definitely do to people.
Haha, thanks everyone!
nice rhymes
journey with a new friend
I think he's hooked...
Well done
Ha! Fun piece rch :-)
Bob,
The things done in the name of love:)
A real committment...
Best Wishes,
Eileen:)
This is a crazy kind of love..ha.ha...
i have to grin with him =)
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