Saturday, March 17, 2012

Overshadowed

Oh Venus, you outshine them all
your glowing face keeps men in thrall
along with fellow gods above
that circle you with rings of love

but Jupiter became so close
my outlook quickly turned morose
until you dodged his bold advance
by spinning faster in your dance

attracted to a star instead
so knowingly I shook my head
and chuckled as the night turned cool
around this wistful mortal tool.

6 comments:

Daydreamertoo said...

Oooo... the fascination that goes on out there in space does make us wonder and a little envious, doesn't it?

Laurie Kolp said...

I like the chuckle... it made me chuckle.

Paige said...

well done AP. the rhyme makes this
poem more entrancing.

Eileen T O'Neill ..... said...

Bob,

Indeed the planets can cause a little faster heartbeat, as of recent days. Moving and dancing with our emotions!!!

Thank you for your coments at my latest poem on my Words and Thoughts Blog Bob. Very much appreciated :)

I have been away from home for almost two weeks, visiting California...Just home.

Best Wishes,
Eileen

Dave King said...

This one seduced me from the off. Captivating.

rch said...

That conjunction was amazing last week wasn't it?