Thursday, July 31, 2008

Sop

The river hugs the valley
exploring every twist,
engorged by all the passion of their
long tempestuous tryst
yet damned to watch the future
eroding in the mist.

5 comments:

Geraldine said...

Interesting! I like the way you've taken such a long journey with a minimal number of words. Well done.

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Noah the Great said...

This says so much to me.

paisley said...

sometimes even we humans can feel as if we are simply watching the future unfold... that's what i love about poetry,, everyone can decide what meaning it holds for them....

in addition, i just want to let you know i am posting my new poetry on justpaisley.... now, and i sure would love it if you came over and had a look....

Stacey said...

Loved this, its great.
Hope your well ;-D

rch said...

Thanks a lot guys, don't have much time, I changed one word to increase the intimacy aspect.

Hey paisley got ya covered ;)