Thursday, October 18, 2007

Twist

My relevance as someone who
continues on without a clue
could easily be likened to
a sightless man describing blue,

for how can one that’s truly blind
express their convoluted mind
with imagery of any kind
that isn’t shoddily designed—

but metaphors are all I’ve got
to help remediate my lot
so doggedly I sit and jot
a paradox within the plot

whose premises are crudely built
from sacrificial juices spilt
when hands of over-zealous guilt
manipulate the jutting hilt.

4 comments:

Brian said...

the first stanza definitely got my attention. bravo!

Dan said...

You possess some of the finest metaphors I've read, Bob. Sacrifices seem to go unoticed, especially by the martyr, but not so for the masses!

rch said...

Hi brian, thanks a lot.

Hey dan, thanks to you as well.

You guys rock!!

paisley said...

this far this is my favorite... blue....the first stanza is brilliant....