Please watch your back, you're going to war
there's no politician that's worth dying for
so always be ready for any attack
you're going to war, please watch your back
be stealthy and swift, be ever alert
we pray you will make it without getting hurt
and wend your way here on the first open lift
be ever alert, be stealthy and swift
your sons can't wait to be with their dad
the most important mission you've ever had
so hurry on home, don't hesitate
to be with their dad, your sons can't wait
Are You Reading Me?
Excellent! I like the message as well as your structure--the way you flip-flopped the rhyming portions.
ReplyDeleteNicely done!
I wish there would be no more war but, until humans learn to ignore ego and greed, it's not going to happen is it.
ReplyDeleteReally great poem :)
Send it to your congressperson! I do think sometimes that people who sit in these chairs forget about the 'heart and soul' of each individual soldier.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very tight poem. The structure is so solid. I love the way line 4 is an inversion of line 1 in each stanza. Your message is also keenly felt.
ReplyDeleteA poignant piece. Always hope they do all make it back to fulfill their mission at home.
ReplyDeleteThanks this is for my grandson's father.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the structure comments (you're deft with structure every time).
ReplyDeleteThe second line is ultimate truth.