They're back with a vengeance this year
those ebon carousers that ceaselessly caw
in fact that's all you can hear
but why did they reappear
I wonder what's the irresistible draw
and then the anchor clarifies:
a local lily ascends another rung
which must have prompted the reprise
of those that populate the skies
a canon to the saintly loudly sung.
I can hear the cacaphony in your verse! Effective use of alliteration as well.
ReplyDeleteAn irresistible draw...they are waiting in the skies ~ Nice one ~
ReplyDeleteLovely verses... I especially liked..
ReplyDeletea local lily ascends another rung
which must have prompted the reprise
Loved the sense of rhythm in this--great sense of the sound of it--it would be great to hear this one aloud
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ReplyDeleteThis is a very loud sounding piece. The noise is deafening....Circling above the praiseworthy chorus...
I imagine an autumnal scene in a churchyard, with those Hitchcock birds, close by...
Sunday Greetings,
Eileen :)
Awesome display of rhyming and vocabulary. What a great scene, quite a hilarious take on nature.
ReplyDeleteHey thanks, those crows were so loud it was hard not to write about them but I guess they had a reason, I will be around to read you all, just been having trouble getting online for more than a few minutes.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy reading poems that rhymes. Its much more appealing to read and there's a depth in it. It just roll out of your tongue when you read it.
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