Sunday, October 21, 2012

Congregation

They're back with a vengeance this year
those ebon carousers that ceaselessly caw
in fact that's all you can hear
but why did they reappear
I wonder what's the irresistible draw

and then the anchor clarifies:
a local lily ascends another rung
which must have prompted the reprise
of those that populate the skies
a canon to the saintly loudly sung.

8 comments:

  1. I can hear the cacaphony in your verse! Effective use of alliteration as well.

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  2. An irresistible draw...they are waiting in the skies ~ Nice one ~

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  3. Lovely verses... I especially liked..
    a local lily ascends another rung
    which must have prompted the reprise

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  4. Loved the sense of rhythm in this--great sense of the sound of it--it would be great to hear this one aloud

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  5. Bob,

    This is a very loud sounding piece. The noise is deafening....Circling above the praiseworthy chorus...
    I imagine an autumnal scene in a churchyard, with those Hitchcock birds, close by...

    Sunday Greetings,
    Eileen :)

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  6. Anonymous7:06 PM

    Awesome display of rhyming and vocabulary. What a great scene, quite a hilarious take on nature.

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  7. Hey thanks, those crows were so loud it was hard not to write about them but I guess they had a reason, I will be around to read you all, just been having trouble getting online for more than a few minutes.

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  8. I enjoy reading poems that rhymes. Its much more appealing to read and there's a depth in it. It just roll out of your tongue when you read it.
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