Monday, January 21, 2008

Dark Matter

I felt your touch
then watched you leave
I hurt so much
but cannot grieve;
the day drags on
though sunlight pales
I seek the dawn
as night prevails.

6 comments:

  1. Yet another Everyman song... I even like your change of print color to reflect the changing light.

    Effective treatment of a difficult subject.

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  2. I just read another, much longer version of this somewhere else. So many ways to express the same thoughts and emotions. Very creative use of color! I must admit that looking at it in black & white on the comments page the message itself seems much darker.

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  3. Hey bub this was my first parrallelism whatchamacallit, just thought I'd post it as I had nothing else.

    Hi Shirley, well that's why I did the colors, because this is so hackneyed it needed something, but alas I am a sentimental sap every now and then.

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  4. Anonymous4:19 PM

    Nothing sapppy anbout being sentimental. I do love this one.

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  5. Bob, sound message. The colors mesmerized me. Did the colors change, or do I need to get to the optometrist??

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  6. I LUV THE COL O R


    Nice how u made day fade into the night.

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